Red Herrings: How to Mislead and Surprise Readers

No matter what genre you’re writing in, there are probably some things you’ll want to keep hidden from your readers until the time is right to surprise them.

But in order to pull off a well-done surprise, you need to be sure to play fair with the reader from the start. That means you’ll need to plant clues that point to the truth in plain sight so that everything makes sense when it comes time for the big reveal.

So, how do you actually surprise the reader if all these real clues are hanging out in plain sight? How do you balance playing fair and “dangling the carrot” in front of your reader?

Put simply, you’ll need to use a mixture of “true clues” (to play fair) and “false clues” (to send readers down the wrong path). These “false clues” are called Red Herrings and that’s what I’ll be covering in today’s post.


What is a Red Herring?

A Red Herring is a piece of information that misleads or distracts the reader (and sometimes the character) from an important truth or leads them to mistakenly expect one outcome over another.

Red Herrings can be anything from:

  • A character who seems evil or suspicious.
  • An object that seems relevant or important.
  • An event that seems to be significant to the story or protagonist.
  • A clue placed by the antagonist or a secondary character that sends investigators down the wrong path.

Red Herrings are a type of foreshadowing.

The term “foreshadowing” refers to all the different ways that an author can give readers hints or clues about what’s coming. Readers pick up on these hints and clues to try and figure out what’s going to happen next (or at the end of the story). But not all of these clues will lead to the truth. Some will be used to deceive the reader about what’s coming—and in these cases, the “false clues” are called Red Herrings.

Red Herrings can be used in any genre.

If your story has any kind of plot twist or surprise ending, you can use Red Herrings. Red Herrings help you to distract or mislead the reader (and your characters) from the truth of what’s actually happening. It’s also worth noting that different genres change how the reader views and responds to Red Herrings. For example, in a true mystery, red herrings are used to make the reader incorrectly guess what has already happened. In a thriller or horror novel, red herrings are used to make the reader incorrectly guess what is going to happen.


Examples of Red Herrings in Harry Potter & the Prisoner of Azkaban

(Warning: spoilers ahead)

In Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban, both the reader and the characters are led to believe that Sirius Black is the story’s main villain. (Besides Voldemort, of course.)

Here’s what readers learn about Sirius Black:

  1. Twelve years ago, there was a Fidelus Charm on the Potter’s house to keep their location a secret. Someone betrayed their location to Voldemort which directly led to Jame’s and Lily’s murder. Most people believe that it was Sirius Black who betrayed James and Lily to Voldemort.
  2. Sirius Black was in Godric’s Hollow on the night of Harry’s parent’s murder. He was sentenced to life in Azkaban for the murder of 12 Muggles and a wizard named Peter Pettigrew. The murder was said to be so violent and messy that all authorities could find of Pettigrew was a bloodstained robe and a few fragments of a finger.
  3. Lately, while in Azkaban, Sirius has been heard murmuring, “He’s at Hogwarts,” in his sleep. It is believed that Sirius wants to kill Harry in order to finish what Voldemort started.
  4. Sirius Black has never tried to escape from Azkaban prison until now. His escape coincides with the Weasley’s return home from Egypt.
  5. Sirius Black is Harry Potter’s godfather.

So, based on those five things, Sirius Black looks like a pretty convincing bad guy, right? Turns out, Sirius Black isn’t out to get Harry at all. He’s actually trying to protect Harry from the person who’s truly responsible for the death of Harry’s parents–Peter Pettigrew. In other words, Sirius Black is a Red Herring. So, now let’s look at everything readers learn about Ron’s pet rat, Scabbers (and how each clue points to the truth about Peter Pettigrew):

Here’s what readers learn about Scabbers:

  1. Scabbers has been in the Weasley family for twelve years. (Harry’s parents were killed twelve years ago, the night Peter Pettigrew was “murdered.”)
  2. Scabbers has been acting strange since the Weasleys got home from Egypt. (Peter Pettigrew learns that Sirius Black has escaped from Azkaban and that he’s been muttering, “He’s at Hogwarts” –“he” being Peter Pettigrew, not Harry.)
  3. Ron buys a rat tonic to help Scabbers feel better, but it doesn’t work. (Scabbers isn’t actually a rat. He’s a human, living his life in his Animagus form as a rat.)
  4. Scabbers is missing a toe on his front paw. (The only thing left of Peter Pettigrew was his finger.)
  5. The Sneakoscope goes off twice when Scabbers is around (first when Ron’s packing it up, second when Crookshanks is picking on Scabbers). (The Sneakoscope is a “dark detector” that lights up, spins, and whistles when someone is doing something untrustworthy.)
  6. Scabbers is constantly hiding, missing, or running away from Ron. (Peter Pettigrew knows Sirius Black is looking for him so he’s doing whatever he can to get away from Hogwarts.)

As you can see, J.K. Rowling gave readers all the clues needed to figure out that Scabbers is actually Peter Pettigrew hidden in plain sight. Wherever one of these clues was laid, Rowling used different techniques to distract the reader from the truth. For example, when the Sneakoscope goes off, Crookshanks has just been chasing Scabbers around the room. Readers might interpret the Sneakoscope sounding off because Crookshanks is “misbehaving.” Or they might dismiss this bit of information entirely–chalking the whole thing up to “typical cat behavior.”

There are of course more clues than what I’ve laid out here, but hopefully, you can now see how Red Herrings work. Now, let’s take a look at some tips for writing your own Red Herrings…


5 Tips for Writing Effective Red Herrings

Red herrings aren’t easy to craft–they have to tread a fine line between visible and invisible. They have to be obvious enough that most readers will pick up on them, but subtle enough that the reader believes it and follows the false trail. So, how do you write effective Red Herrings in your story? Here are my top five tips:

1. Incorporate the Red Herring into the fabric of the story.

Red herrings aren’t something to be pulled out of your hat when the plot lacks tension, excitement, or conflict. Like most storytelling techniques, Red Herrings have to serve a purpose and feel like they’re an organic part of the story. Not only that, but they need to be logical and have some kind of impact on the story. In the above example from Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban, Sirius Black (the Red Herring) plays a huge role in the story. If you took him out of the plot, the whole story would collapse.

2. Give your innocent characters motivation, means, and opportunity.

If you’re planning to use a character as a Red Herring, you’ll need to convince readers that this person could legitimately be guilty. To do this, you could create an innocent character that either:

  • benefits from the crime
  • had the means or opportunity to commit the crime
  • has a strong motive
  • or all of the above.

In Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban, Sirius Black is widely believed to have been the Potter’s “secret keeper.” That gives him both the means and the opportunity to betray their location to Voldemort.

3. Give the reader no (obvious) reason to suspect your guilty character.

In contrast to an innocent character having the motive, means, and opportunity to commit a crime, you’ll want to do the opposite with the real culprit. In other words, give the real culprit no (obvious) motive, means, or opportunity to be involved in the crime. To do this, you could have a guilty character who is acting strange but the protagonist can’t put his or her finger on why (at least not yet).

You could also discredit the guilty character by giving them a personality or skill set that doesn’t feel typical of someone “bad.” In Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban, Professor McGonagall describes Peter Pettigrew as being “a stupid and foolish boy.” She also says that he was “a less than average student.” Nobody would have believed that Peter Pettigrew was capable of not only betraying his friends but of siding with Lord Voldemort too. This is what makes the surprise even more enjoyable.

4. Focus the reader’s attention elsewhere when you plant clues.

Misdirection is not about withholding information. It’s about giving the reader extra information and focusing their attention on that instead of the truth. 

In Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban, it’s easy to overlook all the clues that point to the truth about Scabbers. That’s because J.K. Rowling is a master at planting clues and directing the reader’s attention elsewhere!

Sometimes she diverts the reader’s attention away from the truth by hiding clues within a list of things. For example, the creators of the Maurader’s Map–Moony, Wormtail, Padfoot, and Prongs.

Other times she distracts readers with action or high emotion. For example, when Crookshanks chases Scabbers around the room and Hermione and Ron get into a fight).

The point? Don’t hold important information back from the reader. Figure out a way to not only discretely plant the truth in your story, but to distract the reader from that truth with something interesting too.

5. Always play fair with the reader.

When someone reads your story, they give you their trust. They expect that what you tell them is the truth. They build on each bit of information, trying to understand the big picture and figure out what’s going to happen next. 

Tricking the reader by misleading them is fun (both for them and for you). But if you fool them by leaving out information they would legitimately have expected to be given, then you are just messing with them. 

In Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban, J.K. Rowling gave readers all the clues they needed to figure out Scabbers’ true identity. When the truth was revealed, readers were able to connect all the dots because all the clues were there from the start. 


Final Thoughts

Red herrings are one of my personal favorite storytelling techniques. When done well, they help writers create plot twists that surprise even the most clever of readers.

If you can learn to master this delicate dance of playing fair with the reader by giving them the truth, but diverting their attention elsewhere, you’ll create a story that sticks with readers until the end of time!

Let’s discuss in the comments: What are some of your all-time favorite plot twists or surprises in fiction? What’s one insight from this article that you can put into practice right now? Leave a comment and let me know!

About the Author

Savannah Gilbo is a writer, developmental editor, and book coach based in Southern California. She helps fiction authors finish their drafts and write stories that work. Being a writer herself, Savannah understands the struggles and fears writers face when trying to turn their book dreams into realities. Through coaching and developmental editing, she works with writers of all skill levels to combat these fears, and take their stories from an idea or messy first draft to a finished manuscript that works. She firmly believes that anyone can write a book with the right guidance, tools, and support. When she’s not busy creating her own stories, you can find Savannah mentoring other writers on her blog, or curled up with a good book and her furry partner in crime, Coco.
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Rachel Arsenault says:

I LOVE this! I just finished reading Prisoner of Azkaban a couple of months ago. I had never read the Harry Potter books before, and when I decided to start studying fiction, I knew they were the first ones I wanted to pick up! I’ve found the really lovely thing about them (so far — I’m currently reading Goblet of Fire) is that all of them have this element of mystery you talked about: whether it’s who is trying to get the Sorcerer’s Stone, who is opening the Chamber of Secrets, or who put Harry’s name in the Goblet of Fire. Each of the books has a mystery that is driving the plot forward, all while moving the series-plot, Voldemort and his return, forward as well! And I’ve been delighted every time; there is nothing less satisfying as a reader/viewer than an author or screenwriter pulling out a plot twist with information that you didn’t have! I always feel slighted, haha.

Anyway, this is a fantastic and helpful post! Thanks for sharing!

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Savannah Gilbo says:

Hi Rachel! Thank you for your comment! How fun to be reading Harry Potter for the first time!!! I love that! Just wait until you read the books for a second time — you’ll pick up on a bunch of those clues that you missed on the first read. I reread the whole HP series every 1-2 years and I’m still amazed at how many “new” things I pick up on!

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Larry Pass says:

Hi, Savannah
I’ve noticed that lately most detective shows on TV don’t play by these rules anymore. You might guess whodunit, but important information for deducing whodunit is at best hinted at. A shame.

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Savannah Gilbo says:

Hey Larry! Unfortunately, I think you’re right — there are a lot of detective shows out there that aren’t satisfying these days. Part of what I love about those type of shows or books is being able to guess at the ending — and when the writer doesn’t “play fair” it leaves me feeling cheated and super unsatisfied. Thanks for your comment!

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Anne says:

Great article, Savannah! So many techniques go into a book, whether it’s a thriller or a cozy mystery or literary fiction, and this is one big one. You have a knack for explaining the red herring technique very clearly so that writers of all genres can apply it. I will be using it too! Thank you!!

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Savannah Gilbo says:

Thank you, Anne! 💕 I’m glad you found it helpful. I can’t wait to see what you do with red herrings in your story!

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Vanya Erickson says:

Fabulous article, Savannah! Loved the trip down memory lane with Harry Potter…and has me really thinking about one of my characters in my WIP historical novel.
Thank you!!

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Savannah Gilbo says:

Thank you, Vanya! I love that you’re thinking about using red herrings in your historical novel — so cool! Hope your writing is going well! ❤️

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Kim B says:

Great post! J.K. Rowling is so good at red herrings. She also did it well in The Sorcerer’s Stone with Professor Snape and with Mad-Eye Moody in The Goblet of Fire. A classic movie example is Psycho. We were led to believe the killer was Norman’s mother when it was him all along. Such a shocking ending!

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Savannah Gilbo says:

Hi Kim! Thanks for your comment! I’m glad you liked the post. You’re right about Snape and Moody — there are SO many red herrings in the HP series! They’re such fun books to study! And yes, Psycho is a great example, too — the twist is SO good! And when it happens, you don’t feel cheated because the clues were there all along!

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Dee Todd says:

Helpful article! I love the concept about the different uses of Red Herrings in Mystery vs. Thriller and Horror. Mystery used to incorrectly guess what is already happend; versus Thriller/Horror it’s used to incorrectly guess what is going to happen. Great distinction. Thanks.

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